No Blue Pill, No Red Pill Response

                Hello there! I’m John from Ms. Lees’ class and I’m here to respond to your article of writing. Reading your article was quite enjoyable, since what you wrote made a lot of sense and can connect to different audiences such as; staff of various school, professors, and even students if they spare the time to read what you write. Your writing style for your intro was great! You made it sort of mysterious and put it in a poetic style. I think that was a really great start since it captures the audiences’ attention and makes them want to read more.

 In my opinion, I think you’re trying to express your thoughts on providing motivation for students, and also trying to find some motivation for yourself too. I completely agree with you and your thoughts on motivation of learning. It’s not only the students’ job to have motivation, but the teacher’s job to provide the student with some spark of inspiration and/or motivation. This can be quite tricky because the teacher would have to find ways to somehow flicker that spark of inspiration, and try to cast it to the students so they can get hooked, and have the motivation they need to learn. I think the message you’re trying to tell the audience is that it’s just as hard to have motivation when you’re a teacher, since it’s your job to provide the student with that inspiration that makes them crave to learn, which is quite hard if you think about it.

Like I mentioned before, your intro was well written. It can easily captivate an audience when they first read it. I’d like to give a note about your images that you add with your writing. I find it sort of misleading. Some of your pictures diodn’t connect to what you’re talking about. I do like graphics to help a writer express his or her thoughts, but too many pictures can make the article look sort of ‘squished’. What I mean by squished is that you’re not expressing your thoughts as much through your words, but with pictures.

All in all, I think your article was great! You had a way to connect to your audience, and you had graphics to help extend on your thinking, which helps a lot. For next time, don’t add as much pictures. But I thought the writing and her thoughts were clearly laid out, and maybe I’d like to see some of these types of articles in the future.